If only we had more time.
The time together could have been shining.
But since our time was short.
I'll have to make this quick,
Every minute, every second we waste
is information going down the drain.
Now tell me we have more time.
Oh please dont let it be up.
But this time was great.
Dont let it end.
But now its to late
and all i have to do is wait
for the next time i see you.
It should be soon.
I'll wait by the moon.
For day in and day out
and for night in and night out.
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If you're gunna rhyme at the end, rhyme the whole time.
Also, in this
is information going down the drain.
Information is a bad word to use.
Other than that, you need to lightly revise this, and gather your thoughts. It seems to jump around a little. PM me if you need more help or some explanations.